Artificial Intelligence in the Workplace

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As artificial intelligence continues to develop, many jobs currently performed by humans will be done by machines. Some people regard this as a positive development, while others worry it will cause widespread unemployment and social instability. To what extent do you agree or disagree that the increasing use of AI in the workplace will have more benefits than drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays the technology is develop very fast, and the artificial intelligence become more and more popular in many company. Some people think this is good thing, but other people worry about their job. In my opinion, I think the benefit is more than the drawback. First, the AI can help the company to save much money. In the factory, the robot can work whole day and night without rest, so the cost become lower and the product become cheaper. Also in the hospital, the computer can check the picture of X-ray very fast. Last year my cousin work in a hospital in Shanghai, he tell me the machine find the problem faster than the doctor. This kind of technology save many lifes. Also the AI can help the student to study English, this is very convenient. On the other hand, I know some people is worried. When the company buy the new machine, many worker lose their job, and they do not have enough skill to find the other job. This will make the social problem. Also is not easy for the old people to learn the new thing, they need much time. But I still think the good point is more. Every time when the new technology appear, some job disappear but more new job are created. For example the computer create many new job like the programmer. So the government should give more training to the worker. In conclusion, I agree the AI bring more benefit than drawback to the workplace.